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I keep your tears in a glass jar,
Memories flowing like a river
Down the side, streaking the glass
With stripes of every emotion
You managed to evoke in the
Presence of my wounded heart,
Making sure I won't be so sad and
Gloomy, bringing the sunshine
Back to my life again, and again,
And again.

I keep your love by my heart,
Squeezed between my lungs,
So everytime I think of you, you
Take my breath away, quite
Literally; it isn't poetic license
Or hyperbole, and it sure as Hell
Isn't a metaphor, quite literally
Everytime I see you, I feel as if
All the oxygen in the world had
Been stuffed in my heart.

I keep your smiles in my wallet,
And carry it around everywhere
I go, right next to my driver's permit
And my school ID, my identity
Belonging to you, you little
Identity theft, my little crook, stealing
My heart and placing it behind your
Bed or inside your backpack, showing
Your friends that you are mine and
I am yours.

I keep your laugh in my mind,
And a block of lead around my heart,
Keeping me tethered to reality
And making sure I don't drift away
Into the darkness of space, of where
Our only neighbor's will be Halley and
Dione, circling us, orbiting us, reminding us
That maybe we're not as crazy as we thought
We were, and maybe we should stop keeping
Memories so hidden away.
Life is like a butterfly collection, different in every way.

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Throughshining Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2010
A beautiful piece, flowing perfectly and effortlessly. Well done!
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BipolarBearDisorder Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading it, and for the kind words!
I'm glad you liked it. :]
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Student Writer
This is so beautiful, especially the first stanza in particular. The imagery is perfect, the presence of water really presents the emotion well. A well constructed piece!
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BipolarBearDisorder Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for reading it, and for giving such great feedback! :]

If you don't mind me asking, would you say that stanza is the strongest, or everything else was a little weaker? Every question I ask builds me as a writer. :D
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010  Student Writer
I think it's just personal preference really, I liked your use of liquid description with regards to love, because I feel it fits it soso well! The others are of equal value, just if I had to choose it would be the first. Hope that helps! :heart:
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BipolarBearDisorder Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I get what you mean. Love kind of spills everywhere, gets a little messy and very slippery. At the same time, it can be held in any container no matter how big or small, is refreshing and cooling, and is the main reason why people live. :]
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flawedfairytale Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010  Student Writer
Awh. That's just beautiful. :heart:
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BipolarBearDisorder Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Aw shucks. Thanks again! :]
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littleshireling Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2010
Some really gorgeous images in this. I love it very much.
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BipolarBearDisorder Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :]
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